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I think his teeth are too close together for the first half and you need to REALLY REALLY EXAGGERATE the words "robbed" and "cart" much more. try and find a way to close his mouth closer to an o or u shape because it is very similar to the R mouth shape and in this case the R sound does not have a gritty, angry, teeth-clenching sound to it. one more thing, i feel like since he glances at the camera in the end, he should be "looking at us" a bit more in the beginning. he doesn't have to during the sigh, but sometime after he should make eye contact and should lean his head more in our direction. cause right now it's like, who is he talking to? oh us? really? i know this isn't very crap sandwichy but if you got tunnel vision hahaha
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